Hello to all writers and readers. I'm currently writing a YA fantasy trilogy, and I'm stuck on whether I should put accents in the dialogue. One of the characters is French. Should I just say, "he said it with a french accent." or maybe put in some french words here and there. Any advice would be helpful. Thanks, Marianna
I joined a group through amazon called WriteOn. It's a website where you download your story or parts of it, and you get feedback or so you hope. So far I've only received feedback on my prologue. I've asked for feedback on my first and second chapter, and it seems they only read/skim/read other comments to develop their own. I'm okay with that. Everyone has their way of creating feedback or reading. I know that when look at a novel; I will always follow it because I like to see how the writers take advice and fix it. I will never just comment and then not go back to it. I feel the writers are on this website for feedback not just a quick comment, and that's it.
I, on the other hand, take this feedback very seriously. I took down my prologue, and I'm working on fixing the pace of it. It seems that was the only thing the writers were fixated on. I though YA novels were supposed to be fast pace, but I guess mine was way too fast, and it is. It jumps from Earth to Omega and then five years later. I'm going to end up stretching it out until it's about 20 pages and then delete the whole prologue and sticking it throughout the book.
What are your thoughts on the prologue? I watched a webinar given by Serendipity Literary agent Regina Brooks, and she happened to not care for the prologue. Maybe I will take her advice and get rid of it. I was just trying to set the stage for the story.
My last comment on this whole thing is I happened to read a very good start to a novel on WriteOn. The author's name is Michael F. Stewart (by the way he gave me the most productive feedback). From reading his book on WriteOn, it made me buy his book that he published in March 2013. It's called Assured Destruction, and it's a face pace YA novel. You should check it out. So far so good.....
If you want feedback, you should try and get your book on the WriteOn website. It's nice of amazon to allow writers to comment and give each other feedback. Well, those are my thoughts on WriteOn. If you have any please share.
Did you know that jack-o-lanterns originated in Ireland? The Irish used to carve turnips and potatoes because they didn't have pumpkins in Ireland. It wasn't until America was discovered that the pumpkin was discovered. Can you imagine carving a turnip?
The legend of the jack-o-lantern leads me to tell you about my pumpkin picking experience with my four children.
We used to go to the farm in Yorktown Heights when my two older children were little. We had fun going apple picking, taking a hayride to the pumpkin field and then picking the best pumpkin based on how long its stem was. After we had number four and decided, we were out numbered we decided to check out the local Stew Leonards. Ste Leonards is a fancy supermarket that produce their products from their family owned farm. It went great every year until my four year decided he needed to put his two cents into the mix.
We pulled up to Stew Leonards and immediately he's asking for the hayrides and apple trees. The only reason he may know about farms is because he went on a class trip apple picking. You put them into Kindergarten, and now they know everything. Can anyone relate? So immediately I have a lot of explaining to do. I explain to him that at the farms there are a lot of bugs, rotten apples and the pumpkins are so small. We are going to have so much fun picking pumpkins at Stew Leonards. He was finally excited.
We walked in and looked through the pumpkins. Everyone picked nice size pumpkins and then I saw out of the corner of my eyes Jason going toward the biggest, most awkward pumpkin in all of Stew Leonards. I couldn't even say no to him because the farms have such little pumpkins. It took all my strength to get this monster of a pumpkin into the cart. A few times I wanted to smash it on the floor, but I kept a big smile on my face for my adorable, big mouth four-year-old. We paid for the thirty-five dollar pumpkin, and it took me another ten minutes to get it into the car. In the end, I should've just went to the farm or carved a turnip.
What are your pumpkin picking experiences?
The wind is shaking my window; the rain is dancing on the ground, and I am in my house trying to write something...anything. I decided to put Jenny Baron and the Silver Sword to the side and ask some questions. Where do you like to write? Do you have to be in a certain mood or do you have to be in the right place at the right time?
I would say for myself mood plays an important role. If I'm not in the mood to write, the computer screen will stay blank for hours. The sun helps me with my mood. I can write a whole book from April-June and then spend July-September editing it. Then fall comes along; the dreary, cold weather moves into New York, and I'm at a standstill. I even tried fluorescent lights on my table to mimic the sun, laugh at me; it's fine, but of course it didn't work. It only made me hot and caused black spots to dance along the blank computer screen instead of words. I admit it; it was cool, but I would rather words, sentences, dialogue, anything.
With that being said....how do you get over the hump of a blank computer screen?
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